I am not a poet, but for some reason, I can't fall asleep but I have no motivation to do work, and i feel like writing poetry tonight.
Just one of those times....don't laugh
Keep in mind that this is my first attempt, my nephew emil does a better job in writing poetry. He's pretty good actually. So here's mine and it goes like this....
I hear it all the time,
---Monotonous tick and tocks,
Without feeling or without conscience,
---As I put on my socks.
Hoping that it holds the answers,
---But define me it does not,
Contemplating the sounds of a dead mechanical clock,
---It just keep me in an infinite knot,
Like a shooting star with uncharted path,
---Towards another space of darkness,
As wisdom takes me over,
---Nothing's here except the voids of loneliness,
It moves with reason like a sentient being,
---Fully aware and yet no signs of life,
It is undead but unmotivated,
---It tries with no reason to strive,
A sudden burst of movement,
---What was in order is now chaotic,
The ticks are now increasing,
---It makes no sense, it must be cryptic,
Moving in chaos its ready to break,
---It quibbles violently displacing with time,
Everything seems wrong and uncertain--
---An explosion is near just unsure if it is prime.
Once dead, and yet alive--
---Once it was right and in order,
Time progresses and maybe one day,
---A disarray of events fall together,
What once disappeared could reappear,
---In a different form of certainty,
What was once alive in an explosion,
---Can be calm and again deadly.
by Joey aka. Rizal
This is good. I like the 3rd and 4th paragraph. Keep it up!
ReplyDeleteAzwad: Hahaha, serious ker ko nie. I didn't expect a good response for my first try....but hey, maybe I got talent.
ReplyDeleteI'm not a poet. I'm still learning to write lyrics. Can't give any analysis though but I really think its good.
ReplyDeleteWa...bleh la Joey...abih PhD nanti ada satu lagi buku hasil karya ko. :-) keep it up!
ReplyDeleteI love to read but not to write
ReplyDeleteCoz I know, I am not that bright
You, my friend have is really smart
All you need is to express the art
Azwad: Song writers are poets by definition. They write with their heart.
ReplyDeleteKeindahanalam: Well, I wont quit my day job:)
Ayoi: So you're a poet too.
Now why you take my spotlight...
You liar, you definitely can write,
Being humble and say you are not bright,
I know you just have a lot of insights.
Joey:
ReplyDeleteI'm sorry for stealing the attention
As I don't have any intention
I know you do have the passions
Please continue to entertain us, your loyal audience
Keep it coming, bro! *wink
Ayoi: Pandai ko balas pantun yek....hahaha.....
ReplyDeletejgn tak tau joey... ayoi dulu mmg pemantun, wakil rmc lagi ;) hehehe... anggap je la dier lepas geram :D
ReplyDeleteZatil: Oh, patutlah it comes natural to him. Tak disangka-sangka, berisi juga si Azrul nie. Rasa inferior lak aku. Aku nie saje tgh menggatal test2 skill nie haa.
ReplyDeletei like it..especially the 2nd paragraph. (err, poem has paragraph kan?)
ReplyDeletekeep on writing!